Comment Wall for Scandal Damsel

 

(Image of Thank You balloons from Kris Carr)

Thank you for reading my storybook! Please let me know what you think in the comments!

Comments

  1. Hi! I just have to say, your name and idea for the storybook is so creative and original! It made me laugh and smile, and I am excited for the rest of your stories. I loved reading your introduction and getting to know you. Including the pictures of the princesses, and addressing us as "peasants, princes, and knights" sets the theme for the rest of your site.

    Your writing style is so unique, and very enjoyable to read. It is almost conversational, in the sense that I feel like I can connect directly with you, as the writer, and the characters. The italics really make your story come alive. I really appreciate how you pieced some extra details together. Writing about Cinderella's father and some backstory there is definitely different, but also exciting and entertaining. I am looking forward to reading more of your stories going forward - your storybook theme is FANTASTIC (if I haven't said that already).

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  2. Hi Libby! First of all, your thank you on the comment wall is so cute. Ok this idea seems so fun! I am so excited to read this storybook! It is giving me Gossip Girl vibes! There is so much drama that I cannot wait to read about!

    I really love how your commentary is in italics. I like the craziness of the step-sisters that they were so desperate to fit into the shoe that they cut off their toes. In the story that children read, they don't really have any consequences to their actions besides for not getting the prince. In the original Grimm Brother story, they created their own consequences. They could have kept all their toes, but they were so inclined to fit into the shoe that they didn't think about the aftermath of having less toes.

    One area that could be altered is maybe the color of the background of the story or the picture in the header. It personally does not pop to me as much as your story is popping.

    Overall, AMAZING story. I am really excited to read about Snow White and Sleeping Beauty!

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  3. Hello,
    I really enjoyed your introduction.
    It feels like a tmz article or tabloid. Its a silly and short opening, which I think was done quite well. I'm not sure, but it sounds like you are hinting at the original Brothers Grim stories, especially with the blood on the shoe. Even though the tale is darker, I love it! One of my favorite parts from the original Cinderella, which I hope you consider adding, is when the stepsisters' eyes are pecked out by birds.
    I like how you end each summary with a question. It intrigues the readers to continue on.
    Your website is nice. However, I think your design could be improved by placing the images you have on the introduction on an image carousel.

    I can't wait to read your stories.

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  4. Hey Libby!
    I love this idea for a storybook. Im getting some pretty spooky vibes as I browse through your project, but I like it. I think the theme of the red is a good touch as well. The Cinderella story is one of my favorites from Disney and your retelling gives such good detail about the story. I thought your comments throughout the story was really funny and made me laugh at times. The anonymous tag at the end as well as the hilarious name of scandal damsel fits incredibly well. I am glad someone else notices the blatant disrespect that the father portrays in the story, I never liked that guy. You really dug in deep to offer new material that most of us have probably never thought about or noticed. Overall, great job!

    Best,
    Payton

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  5. Hi Kristen, oh I mean, Libby!

    This is such a fun storybook and very creative! I love that you are exposing the scandalous sides to our favorite princesses. I love the red color scheme and your introduction page. You give us a little taste of each story, but leave us wanting to read more! That is how I did mine as well! I also love how you switch between italicized words to interject your own commentary as the story goes on. Very clever! I liked how you kept the father alive and made him one of the villains, but I felt that he could have been more active in the story than sitting by and just letting things happen. Perhaps he could have more of a reason for being included in the story, like to team up with the stepmother or to play favorites with the sisters? But overall, I really enjoyed this story, and I like that you added so many new elements to a classic story!

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  6. oh my gosh I'm so excited to keep reading your storybook! I'm not embarrassed to admit that I'm a fan of Gossip Girl and your idea is going to be so much fun to write about!! Your home page and intro really set the vibe of your page. Your intro made me laugh and curious to read about the scandals I missed out on. I like how you have images of each of the princesses to the side. I think everyone knows who they are but it was a nice detail to add. Your intro is packed full of details so I already know your stories are gonna be so entertaining to read. I don't really have anything to critique about your introduction besides maybe playing with formatting. It could be fun to assign a specific text color to each princess and leave your character's voice as black? You could also find images depicting each scandal and include them in a carousel. The details from the non-Disney versions could be better explained with images. You did a really good job with this so far!!

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